InCizion & Doc Collab.............

[M.V.W.]

Multies were on point! Doc went insane on his his. I liked the imagery with the molecules and weapons. And, InCiz, your line about blackening eyes was my fave out your verse.

[InCizion]

Originally Posted by Seyance

Doc - Not bad at all, you need to concentrate on the syllable count of your multi's abit more though, you didn't keep it at a consistant level of either 3syllables or whatever, it was real up & down.. which made it kinda hard to catch your flow in some parts.. multies seemed kinda forced at times, don't try squeeze so many in to the short bars.
I did enjoy reading the verse overall though.

Ciz - You've obviously got the vocab to be able to pull of a complicated rhyme scheme, but you were trying to overcomplicate it which made things feel forced. E.g when you stick 'n givin' on the end of that line near the bottom, it'd of been real smooth if you had put 'poor wishin/forgivin' and missed the line inbetween out.
When using a rhymescheme, you don't have to rhyme all the rhymescheme in your inners to make it hott, you don't even have to keep with the same scheme.

Keep at it.

Yeah I hear you........When I flow these to audio's.... shit sounds hot..... But I try to complicate the flow too much sometimes....